MarikBentusi's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Desert-Mayhem: OVERDRIVE]

Something about the sound design felt really muted and like it lacked "punch" when it needed to, but the visuals had a very fun style!

Biborig responds:

Which parts in the sound design do you think needed more punch? I'm looking to learn from this tbh and appreciate the honesty in your review.

[Secret Summer]

your art style is *gorgeous*, I especially love how the pastel contrasts against the raven character!

[Undertale Ruins Genocide]

I'm amazed by how much character you managed to express despite the limited resolution and constant deadpan face of the main character! And there's so many added details like wobbling and bouncing to really bring them alive! Awesome!

[BEACON]

The moody, grimdark atmosphere and sound design was great! As some mild visual critiques I think sometimes the 3D looks overdetailed/out of style with the 2D main art style (like the pixely map on the arm around 3:20), and around 4:16 the hands don't look like they're touching ground to me (maybe has something to do with the shadows).

[pizza guide.]

excellent comedic timing!

[Satina Episode 1 - Bring Your Demon to Work Day]

So many little details! So many little extra animations, background jokes and sound effects! Absolutely delightful!

[The Northern Incident]

I laughed

Good graphics, hilarious story until the Furries came. It's like you tried to accumulate as many clichés as possible. Hell, even the window glass was so thin the dog could jump through it like it was nothing and of course the protagonist thought his chances of survival would be better if he waited inside the forsaken house instead of walking on the road and hoping to find a car or even a building.

All in all really forgettable and one-dimensional tho.

[Wilhelm Park]

Meh

Good graphics, lame story. Every twist could be predicted from the start where an accurate description of the monster was given.

Also, what's the whole point if the two get together in the end anyway? Monster might have stayed human as well. Or does the girl have a serious octopus fetish?

[Talking with Edward Elric]

good graphics, bad story

Good graphics, bad story. Not really funny nor surprising, the story (BOY MEETS GIRL) has been done a looooooooooot of times. Also, interesting how little time it takes to turn from stranger to lover... or at least kiss-able person. But okay, enough of the story, I think you know that wasn't the strong point.

Graphical style is quiet nice and clean, I recommend you stick to that style and maybe keep the picture a bit more in motion/action in the future if necessary. I liked the change to chibi-style. Strongest point of your entry and giving you the most points.

Sounds are "basic". No sound effects however (but they might be taken out during the calm music for artistic effect) and the voices were... bad? Sorry, didn't sound very in-situation or anything.

Also, after the squeak, how about immediately showing the unwanted guests for an even more surprising moment?

Compared to the really great entries on NG, this isn't more than 5 points. But keep on making flash movies, you're on a very good train. :)

LovelyKouga responds:

LOL your comment makes me laugh because maybe you didn't read the creators comment? XD It was SUPPOSED to be as cheesy and cliche as possible, so I'm actually rather pleased it got this reaction out of you. XD Also I know you can't really tell, but when it fades out to white when Edward sits down, it's supposed to be a time-skip of a few hours of talking. :)

I agree, too much tweening and not enough frame-by-frame animation. Thanks I'll try harder next time! :D

Yes during the music, no effects at all...but there was the camera sound and record scratch later on after the music stopped. OKAY I am going to do that before I submit this to DeviantART, I think it really WILL look better than the plai white. Thank you! :)

[The Dreaded Play Button]

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Okay, one point for the "preloader", but you know I can't give you much more, right? :P

I think it's a cute idea and ideal if you wanna do a stick movie with a similar style. For everything else, it's too empty, simple and white and this simplicity is what stick movies are famous for, right?
However, it takes too much time until something happens, at least for me. I tried to click on it and when I saw it didn't work I thought "maaan, another retard that didn't test whether the buttons work or not", but then I read your description and looked at it again - but you can't all people expect to act like that.
How about you try this: Make a real button, only it doesn't play to movie. If you click on it, the button will change it's shape a bit to show the user that he "successfully clicked on it". You know, just like clicking a button on your OS, it changes it's shape a bit then, too, right? And then, after clicked, around 1 or 2 seconds after that, let the button trigger the stick-animation. If you can do that, of course xD

I hope that was a bit helpful! The stick looks cute, make sure you put a lot of effort into your movie :D You've got to practise, practise, practise! If there's a new version, feel free to send me a message and I'll take another look at a more progressed version (If you think my advice was helpful that is :p).

Sothleks responds:

Oh trust me, I think that responce was VERY helpful. Like I said, this is my first flash, and I'll take all the advice I can get. The main problem I have is I'm not fluent in flash speak, as it were. I don't know everything there is to know about it, nor do i think I'll learn any time soon. I agree that the button takes too long before anything happens, and that was actually something I planned. I've been in the same position, "ahh some retard..." and thought that it would be something funny that most people would get. Plus, it's something that allows the stick guy to do. Fix the button. which is what he'll have to do.

Again, I'm very greatful for your advice, and I could use all the help I can get. thank you for watching!

--Skeel